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I think your response may have come at the same time as a 3rd comment I was throwing in, thus your edit canceled mine out. Anyway, what I wanted to say was that I was confused as to why you wanted Dr. Hartell in with the boys. See, the thing is, if you are faces with a situation like this where there is a large group angry at and getting physical with a small group, the most logical thing to do is remove the small group they are angry at from the area, such as sending the boys to your office with a male teacher in order to make sure they stay in line. I was about to throw in an edit asking the person you asked to go in with them to just bring them to your office now before the decision point is reaced and re-phrase the decisions to be getting the cheer squad's story here in the front office, going to your office to get the boy's story, or taking Mary asside to some other room to get her story. However, I stopped in my tracks when I realized the person you had to go with the boys was Dr. Hartell. She would not be an appropriate choice for who to send with the boys, but I didn't want to change the person who goes with them if you had some kinda plan for Dr. Hartell. [[User:Jemini|Jemini]] ([[User talk:Jemini|talk]]) 08:05, 28 December 2017 (CET)
I think your response may have come at the same time as a 3rd comment I was throwing in, thus your edit canceled mine out. Anyway, what I wanted to say was that I was confused as to why you wanted Dr. Hartell in with the boys. See, the thing is, if you are faces with a situation like this where there is a large group angry at and getting physical with a small group, the most logical thing to do is remove the small group they are angry at from the area, such as sending the boys to your office with a male teacher in order to make sure they stay in line. I was about to throw in an edit asking the person you asked to go in with them to just bring them to your office now before the decision point is reaced and re-phrase the decisions to be getting the cheer squad's story here in the front office, going to your office to get the boy's story, or taking Mary asside to some other room to get her story. However, I stopped in my tracks when I realized the person you had to go with the boys was Dr. Hartell. She would not be an appropriate choice for who to send with the boys, but I didn't want to change the person who goes with them if you had some kinda plan for Dr. Hartell. [[User:Jemini|Jemini]] ([[User talk:Jemini|talk]]) 08:05, 28 December 2017 (CET)
Hmmm... if you go with displaced punishnent for the boys then Jason's sister is already wanting to have a baby. Freddy on the other hand, has 3 sisters: a teacher (hardly appripriate) a 10 year old, who is a cheerleader and might already be involved in the punishment, and an 8yo who won't be able to get preggo unless the fertility treatment is working.
That said, i think a severe punishment for the the boys would be more effective. Maybe sex with each other for every time the girls have sex? Of course fighting is only a single severe infraction, so jumping straight to forced impregnation is a little extreme. At most you could justify popping their cherries unless one or more are habitual offenders... like Pearl. --[[User:Notsooldpervert|Notsooldpervert]] ([[User talk:Notsooldpervert|talk]]) 14:36, 28 December 2017 (CET)

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For those planing on adding to this. The idea is that Mary Franklin has confronted Freddy and Jason in the past about their bullying of Diya, this has always been in the presence of her friends and so the bullies didn't retaliate. this time however they caught her alone by the gym and decided to take their frustrations out on her with their fists. The rest of the squad caught them and as a group took matters into their own hands. You mess with one of them you mess with all of them kinda thing.

Yeah I got the idea when reading the profiles, along with an earlier mention of the MC wanting to impregnate the entire cheer squad together. My mind then started going into overdrive, these boys are part of the group that harasses Diya. Since she is part of the cheer squad, not the main squad but still part of the squad, this would already put them on bad terms with the squad. Mary is very protective of Diya so she would have said something to the boys, counting on her popularity to protect her. Then the boys confront and attack Mary, the rest of the squad see it, and go nuts 'cuz now they are attacking a member of the Main Squad. This of course could cause some very big issues, first off the girls were acting to protect Mary, who was being attacked, but they took it too far. Also since the girls actions wee a result of the boys actions, they all now have to share the same punishment, since they acted to defend Marry, she has to share it as well. If the punishment is impregnation the boys can't be impregnated so another female family member has to take their place. Is the MC willing to do this or will he find a way to get them a lesser sentence given the circumstances.Telgar (talk) 2209, 28 December 2017 (PST)


The one issue I have with this is the believability factor. I'm having a hard time buying that a couple boys, especially in such a traditionalist society, could physically beat up a girl younger than them. There is just too much social pressure against it, they would have to be ass-holes of simply unbelievable proportions for them to even consider such a thing. Jemini (talk) 04:57, 28 December 2017 (CET)

Actually, upon checking out the profiles for the two boys, I can sorta see it happening like this. Jemini (talk) 05:33, 28 December 2017 (CET)

I think your response may have come at the same time as a 3rd comment I was throwing in, thus your edit canceled mine out. Anyway, what I wanted to say was that I was confused as to why you wanted Dr. Hartell in with the boys. See, the thing is, if you are faces with a situation like this where there is a large group angry at and getting physical with a small group, the most logical thing to do is remove the small group they are angry at from the area, such as sending the boys to your office with a male teacher in order to make sure they stay in line. I was about to throw in an edit asking the person you asked to go in with them to just bring them to your office now before the decision point is reaced and re-phrase the decisions to be getting the cheer squad's story here in the front office, going to your office to get the boy's story, or taking Mary asside to some other room to get her story. However, I stopped in my tracks when I realized the person you had to go with the boys was Dr. Hartell. She would not be an appropriate choice for who to send with the boys, but I didn't want to change the person who goes with them if you had some kinda plan for Dr. Hartell. Jemini (talk) 08:05, 28 December 2017 (CET)

Hmmm... if you go with displaced punishnent for the boys then Jason's sister is already wanting to have a baby. Freddy on the other hand, has 3 sisters: a teacher (hardly appripriate) a 10 year old, who is a cheerleader and might already be involved in the punishment, and an 8yo who won't be able to get preggo unless the fertility treatment is working.

That said, i think a severe punishment for the the boys would be more effective. Maybe sex with each other for every time the girls have sex? Of course fighting is only a single severe infraction, so jumping straight to forced impregnation is a little extreme. At most you could justify popping their cherries unless one or more are habitual offenders... like Pearl. --Notsooldpervert (talk) 14:36, 28 December 2017 (CET)