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Actually, the letter can't be first. The letter is in response to Mr. Gardner expressing concern over the Franklin mother's abusive punishments. I'm planning to fully re-write Mary's part of the Cheer-squad incident in order to conform to them being married. Also, it's the McGreggor girl incident that happens in the morning, and the Franklin girls are supposed to be later the same week. I'm going to have to correct that error in the cheer squad incident as well. [[User:Jemini|Jemini]] ([[User talk:Jemini|talk]]) 22:34, 27 February 2020 (CET)
Actually, the letter can't be first. The letter is in response to Mr. Gardner expressing concern over the Franklin mother's abusive punishments. I'm planning to fully re-write Mary's part of the Cheer-squad incident in order to conform to them being married. Also, it's the McGreggor girl incident that happens in the morning, and the Franklin girls are supposed to be later the same week. I'm going to have to correct that error in the cheer squad incident as well. [[User:Jemini|Jemini]] ([[User talk:Jemini|talk]]) 22:34, 27 February 2020 (CET)
That would work. I don't remember his complaint about Mrs. Franklin being the impetus of the letter, though. When it first comes out she goes pale and runs back inside with her daughter. It's later that the evil bitch plays in public trying to force her daughters into Gardner's bed. I do like the idea of the wedding being first (so Mary can have the white dress), and her mother's reaction (with the dozens of people witnessing it) could lead to the letter being sent out. In fact, the marriage itself could be taken for proof the system is working. --[[User:Notsooldpervert|Notsooldpervert]] ([[User talk:Notsooldpervert|talk]]) 22:48, 27 February 2020 (CET)

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No option to take them to the brothel? I remember Diya's mom asking for her first time to be in a place that she's familiar with and Mr. Gardener made a promise. --MrPib (talk) 15:39, 27 February 2020 (CET)

At the reception it can be established whether or not you made a "deal" with Mrs. Varanno on if she can "help" with punishments involving sex with virgins and impregnation of the younger girls. Even if it's to make certain that it doesn't apply to your new wives, we can have a way to move forward with that version. It was the Franklin girls that was done with wasn't it? Or was it with the girl who threw the rock through your window? I forget. Either way, it establishes a scene. --Notsooldpervert (talk) 20:46, 27 February 2020 (CET)

Ah! It was established with Kellie McGreggor that Mrs. Varanno would help you fuck and impregnate the little ones (either with or without adding her own daughter to sweeten the deal). When the Franklin girls came in for punishment, her watching/helping was one of the options. Thus the confusion on when it started. --Notsooldpervert (talk) 20:59, 27 February 2020 (CET)

Kellie was punished Week 8 Monday morning. The Franklin's are Monday afternoon. The wedding takes place in week 4. --MrPib (talk) 21:44, 27 February 2020 (CET)

Then there's an issue. The way it's written, Mary's punishment with the squad has to be before the marriage, or she wouldn't be freaking out about what her mother had told her and her sisters would happen to them that morning. The Franklin girl's punishment was the morning before the cheer squad got in trouble, so Mary was quite anxious. If she was going to the office to see her husband of two weeks, there wouldn't be much fear of the punishment, just pain from the beating to cause her to cry so much. Either the cheer squad needs to be bumped up a few weeks (which can't happen because the sister's punishment is tied to the letter), or the marriage needs to wait until the end of term (after the cheer squad punishment). Either way, Mrs. Varano would have already made the deal (or tried to) to witness/participate in the younger girl's punishment when it involves full sex (with her daughter's body as payment or not) before the wedding. --Notsooldpervert (talk) 21:53, 27 February 2020 (CET)

Actually, the letter can't be first. The letter is in response to Mr. Gardner expressing concern over the Franklin mother's abusive punishments. I'm planning to fully re-write Mary's part of the Cheer-squad incident in order to conform to them being married. Also, it's the McGreggor girl incident that happens in the morning, and the Franklin girls are supposed to be later the same week. I'm going to have to correct that error in the cheer squad incident as well. Jemini (talk) 22:34, 27 February 2020 (CET)

That would work. I don't remember his complaint about Mrs. Franklin being the impetus of the letter, though. When it first comes out she goes pale and runs back inside with her daughter. It's later that the evil bitch plays in public trying to force her daughters into Gardner's bed. I do like the idea of the wedding being first (so Mary can have the white dress), and her mother's reaction (with the dozens of people witnessing it) could lead to the letter being sent out. In fact, the marriage itself could be taken for proof the system is working. --Notsooldpervert (talk) 22:48, 27 February 2020 (CET)